Trying to hard to be....SOMETHING
Concept: a virtual reality game tied in to real life. Honestly I'm not exactly sure what your aiming for with this series.
Aesthetic:
colors are okay, but nothing eye candy in quality. Drawing is okay although your style is kind of gimmicky ( for "humor" purposes) which would be okay if the characters were interesting to look at let alone listen too for 10+ minutes. I think your characters need better designs if you're trying to be original. Most of them have bland one dimensional personality traits that can be guessed at face value. Pretty forgettable characters and those that are remembered will be for the wrong reasons Nyloc will be remembered because he's annoying, and kirbopher because he looks like Link from Zelda games.
Sound quality is the one thing that doesn't need change in this series. Character dialogue is probably clear enough for those with impaired hearing and the subtitles are a convenience when they are there. The voice actors are pretty good and give the illusion of characters sounding more interesting than they actually are.
Story:
Kurobpher and gang stalk nylocs so-called friend gamecrazed into a mansion where they discover upcoming weapons and events.The execution of the plot was kinda bland. First of all why is Nyloc stalking his friend? If he's known him for a year why couldn't he just ask to go along with him in the first place? A year is enough time to be comfortable around someone enough to simply ask "can i join you?" I mean if gamecraze gave a lame excuse as to why he didn't want company then at least they have a reason to stalk him.
That alone kinda makes two of your characters seem unintelligent or socially inexperienced.
Humor:
When you use a gimmick to define a characters personality in a painfully obvious way (racial stereotypes, over zealous anime stylized screaming) it's not funny and the lack of effort shows.You have alot of unnecessary and badly timed humor. And the "stealth" scene choreographed with cheesy music, made want to click the back button. What happened to the humor between episode 1 and 2? The comedic timing in episode one was God-like compared to this.
Animation:
Kinda lacking in it's own genre. I know it's an MMO but it doesn't mean you have to animate it like one. Aside from the first fight with kibopher vs robot with the only downside being choppy animation. All the others were to slow and not that intense. Faster action and better action choreography would've made a huge difference. Not good since this is my only motivation for watching this episode.
IMPROVEMENTS:
-Study up and GREATLY improve your character design both in drawing aswell as giving your characters interesting personalities.
-Work on presenting stronger action scenes
-Quality of humor is pretty low.Either get rid of it, be subtle, or GREATLY improve on it with better variations of humor. Cause as of now your random attempts are painful to watch.
I've notice you have the interest of alot of talented artist/Good reviewers here on Newgrounds. Please don't brush criticism aside, if you can't take it from some anonymous user present it to a colleague or a former teacher and see what he/she thinks. Doing your own thing is fine but when you submit to NG it's here to be reviewed not mindlessly praised with 10's and 5's.
OVERALL: Your desire to pump these out as soon as possible is revealing the lack of quality in your work. Granted you have potential but I think you should take more care in your work. Until then...
2/5